I read a bunch of we novels, and this is definitely the quality of some of the ones I have come across. Youll get lots of comments to suggest improvements. If you choose your premise wisely enough, something with dedicated fans, you might get those people to stick around and keep offering comments.
Something like 'I'm a furry dog person and I got transported to hogwarts' with a NSFW label, and some people will stick around.
Some regular writing schedule would also give you practice and take some of the overly flowery language out - which could be good.