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dzsimbo@lemmy.dbzer0.com 3 weeks agoI think I was able to bring the ‘at’ closer to the time, but I’m not sure it’s correct:
‘This can’t possibly be the same 9pm I used to start getting ready at for a night out’
I’m tempted to remove the ‘used to’ and just put it in simple past for brevity, but that would hold back half the punch.
This is one of my favorite types of discourse. Polishing jokes and grammar in the gravitas it deserves.
Excrubulent@slrpnk.net 2 weeks ago
Yeah, that scans for me. It breaks up “getting ready…for a night out”, but I think it works.
I think honestly it’s just a reality that, if brevity is the soul of wit, then a punchy sentence needs to be compact and that means you need to get a bit funky with the grammar, so maybe the audience has to do a little work.
Maybe also “at which” is fine too, and I was just overthinking it.
One thing I won’t bend on is that “to be starting to get ready” is objectively worse in every respect and is the main thing that throws people about the sentence.