“You” should not be capitalized unless it is the first word in the sentence. You have it capitalized inappropriately in several places on the itch.io page. The consistent English mistake with “you” makes me think there might be other English errors in the game. This is a text-based game, where I will spend most of my time reading. I don’t want to spend my time reading things that have lots of English errors. And I don’t think I’m the only potential player who decides not to play because of your English mistakes.

I don’t want to be mean, but you did ask for feedback so I feel it’s appropriate to share this. I do love the concept of playing as a villain protagonist, it’s what made me click on your post in the first place.